Slightly NSFW (cleavage) - young lady death.

[plufim]

She named Daisy, but not after that slightly unhinged kart racer we all know and love.

http://www.plufim.com/temp/2006web.jpg

[Shorty]

Although the lineart and colouring is great... I have to criticise the face... it just looks kinda male to me! The freckles remind me of Jimmy Olsen in the Superman animated series :D

Still, you've got the skills :)

[Colin]

Although the lineart and colouring is great... I have to criticise the face... it just looks kinda male to me! The freckles remind me of Jimmy Olsen in the Superman animated series :D

Still, you've got the skills :)

Yeah I agree. The face needs some work. With such a nice body like that she would be killing herself over the freakles.

Also the definitions where her legs end at her hips are well too high (unless they are there to show her stomach muscles?).

I love how you've made her shirt so naturally flowing, as that's a very hard part to get right.

So ace drawing............keep up the good work. :smile:

[Eenuh]

I have to agree I think, her face doesn't go too well with her body. Should be more feminine. Try making her eyes smaller (they're huge here, really) and give her a bit of an upper lip maybe. Could help a lot already.
Other than that, this is a really nice drawing. I like the weapon thingie of which I don't remember the name right now.

[Lammie]

I reckon it's pretty damn slick.

He's definately got the neck down areas down-pat.

[Gaijin von Snikbah]

There are many god things about this picture, but that face isnt one of them. :p I reckon the same as ye above, cleaner face, and no freckles. Thanks for your cooperation.

[Offerman]

Awesome body and drawing, but as people say the face needs modifications.

It needs to be provocotive and seductive.

[Adrian DX]

Nicely done, but I agree with the face... dunno what it is that makes it look so manly, but try some of the tips the others gave..

[King_Mushroom]

Im not one for drawing women myself, but to help make it look more feminine maybe raise the cheek bones ever so slightly.
Why dont you look up some other Manga chicks for reference?

Other than that its a freakin awesome pic, what program do you use?

[Shino]

Am I the only one that thinks freckles are sexy?

[Shorty]

Yes, but I don't think they look bad - personally I didn't find the freckles the main problem - there was just another issue that I can't place. I'll have my creative-art-boffin friends look over it for an explanation :P

Edit: btw, it's been bugging me - what's NFSW?? I checked acronymfinder.com to no avail. I keep thinking "Need for Speed -- something".

[Eenuh]

Edit: btw, it's been bugging me - what's NFSW?? I checked acronymfinder.com to no avail. I keep thinking "Need for Speed -- something".

You might not be finding an answer because it's NSFW, not NFSW. =P
But it means Not Suited For Work, in case you were still wondering.

And freckles are nice and probably aren't the problem in this drawing, though they -are- a bit dark and look a bit more like pimples than freckles. But still, the problem is just that her face isn't femine enough. It's nice to have a style to draw in, but if it doesn't work for a drawing, it might be wise to try and change that style a bit to make it work.
That being said, I'd like to see an edited version of this drawing, if there's ever going to be one. =3

[Shorty]

Ok I guess I just got NFS (need for speed) in my head. Blame it on scotoma :D

I'll get my coat.

[Lammie]

The face needs to be more suggestive. At the moment it's stuck in that Mona Lisa kind of limbo where you don't know how to feel. It's possibly too child like.....which clashes with the massive cleavage. Perhaps make the eyes smaller so she doesn't look so innocent.